Ho Har!?! I like the use of awkward words in Poetry - particularly if one is able to complete the dual function of relevance and rhythm in a rhyming piece. I also enjoy the distinct Beginning-Verse-End function of the three stanzas, and the way you have dealt with the flu from three perspectives (if that makes sense... I guess I perceived it as 1 - when someone else has it, 2- what it feels like when *you* have it and 3 - what *we* does about it). Despite the overt awesomeness, one does question the second line in the second verse. it is too long and rhymes on itself instead of in a pair or partnership, suggesting that it should be separated from the body of the verse or revised to fit more appropriately.

But hey, you wrote it not me, so I can only assume you intended it!

Keep up with the bringing of the good goods (!)

Sergio Z. Manwualez
Writer/Hypochondriac